As Max & Ben dash through the mountains hey could see a white gloomy slender man with his friend Aaron and Aaron had a jack hammer.”what was that rumbled max I don’t know what it is
Is it a slenderman our Aaron gasped Ben.As slenderman got closer!!! He started to yell like a fluffy cat.”The slenderman said i will kill you two Max and Ben said the slenderman”slenderman was freezing cold and max had a shotgun. max was along and Ben had
a shotgun.’ max was along and Ben was never to be seen again.
I wonder is max going to see his best friend?
By Max & Ben
This week we have been learning about DASH? paragraphs for adventure stories.
- D = describe the setting
- A = use action
- S = use speech
- H = describe how the character is feeling
- ? = use a cliffhanger or rhetorical question
We wrote collaboratively and used a writing frame for this learning task, then we wrote our own paragraphs today.
Hi Ben my name is Daniel and I am a year 6 and 10 years old. I really liked how you putten in slender man and IT FELT SO SCARY!!The thing that I saw it that who is hey on the first sentence. I hope you blog on my blog as well comment you later.
ReplyDeleteYou could change hey to they so it could make even scene.
DeleteOK Daniel i will take it out the he
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